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But listen to me: I will tell you
how to love a bedspread;
a car seat; a sun dress
that you cleaned two months ago.

and should they find her
in the breast of a riverbank
or a cabinet,

I will tell you
facts about scavenger birds;
kettles, wakes and how to chair a committee
with a body on your desk,

as scavenger birds do.
A poem about tragedy poetry. I read once that if you weren't there, you shouldn't talk about it.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014   General Artist
all too amazing of a piece, awesome person! :tighthug: :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
love this. read it, understood the title, reread again. beautiful and telling in a discrete way.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic. Stark and paced perfectly. I do appreciate a well placed line-break. :)
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SacredArtist Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Nice Poetry
Jason in Oregon
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Cheers
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MeteorSage Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Artist
Awesome piece.
I love the subject!
10/10
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:icongay-mountain:
Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Hey I'm glad you enjoyed it. Cheers for your comment
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PivotShadow Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
:iconwhatdoesitmeanplz: It's clearly powerful, but I'm not sure what it's about..can someone tell me?
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Hi there, if you have a look on the first page of the comments I actually discussed this a little with :iconim-sabbo: and :iconpepsiboy81: . Thanks for your comment
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MeteorSage Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Artist
OP said it was about tragic poetry and then went on to say " if you weren't there, you shouldn't talk about it."
I think it's a narration directed to people who write about tragedies that never affected them in any way other than making them feel a little bad for someone else.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
In a way you're right, although this poem is more inward than outward - it's addressing that part of me (or any writer) that feels they can or should be writing about something like this. So it's not so much "You shouldn't write about this!" as "...wait, should I really write about this?" Not sure if that makes sense; I'm not great at explaining stuff, sorry.
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jskullly Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
hum. that's too pretty. it must die
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jskullly Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
it's really beautiful, it should live in eternal glory. it should have a host of angels to sing its praises, like that guy has, uhm... you know who I'm talking about? the one with the beard.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Lebowski
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jskullly Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
hmm. Yeah, that might be who I'm thinking of.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz: :iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
thanks :)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconflyingheartsplz::blowkiss::iconflyingheartsplz:
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Minkymy Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
this is amazing.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Thank you
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Minkymy Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
Of course~ ^^
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Starsieinwonderland Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Artist
Very powerful...excellent!
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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notofthisearth Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
I like this...

Billy
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Cheers
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notofthisearth Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
:)

Billy
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Mikki-of-the-Wind Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I deeply enjoyed this piece. It's rare for one to make me instantly tear up.
Well done.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
thank you
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AskMontreal Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wooooow...
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
haha, thanks :)
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Bark Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Impressive! Congrats on a well-deserved DD. I've lived through a lot of tragedy, and I can taste it here.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you
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Ieitmotif Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
I love your username ~Gay-Mountain other than that xD Great poetry.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Haha thanks :) I actually think this is one of the first times my poetry's 'outshone' my username
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magpie-poet Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Very sharp and catching, elegant. For some reason I think of broken glass with light all in shambles.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thank you. For some reason that image makes the soles of my feet hurt.
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magpie-poet Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Sorry, didn't mean to cause pain!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Congratulations on receiving a Daily Deviation. :)
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
cheers :)
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vellusz Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This quality of poetry is extremely rare on deviantArt. Well done!
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thanks so much, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   Writer
wow. i am so angry at myself for never having read this before. the dd is very well deserved, congratulations, love!
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thanks :) Seriously, it really means a lot to hear that from you
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   Writer
of course :heart:
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   General Artist
Excellent job, a well deserved DD.

Is the narrator speaking to a man who's lost a lover?
It seems to be so.
It seems also murder is being insinuated deep down in between the stanzas...by hands unknown. This could be the tragedy you speak of?

"kettles, wakes and how to chair a committee
with a body on your desk,"

There's the lines that really stand out to me, speaking of life after losing a loved one, perhaps?

Wonderful work, again. Thank you for sharing.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Thanks, it is intended to imply something similar to that. It feels strange to say in the context of the poem, but those lines are my favourite and were actually kind of serendipitous. If you read the third paragraph on this article, you'll see what I mean [link]
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013   General Artist
That little bit makes it even more interesting, I didn't even know vultures had that many names.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Yeah, there have been a few times where I've been wikipedia hopping and then taken down notes because I found a phrase that was just so super awesome. It's how I ended up writing [link] this poem and [link] and [link] are two of my favourites as well.
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013   General Artist
Here is that link to the piece I mentioned in the other comment, btw. I completely forgot.

[link]

She's been editing it I think so that might be why it messed up. Thumbs seem to be effing up in general lately for me for some reason, though.
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Im-Sabbo Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
I see it more as - and I should note, I'm basing this off the Author Comments - the writer saying "You speak of tragedy, I speak of my world".
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