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But listen to me: I will tell you
how to love a bedspread;
a car seat; a sun dress
that you cleaned two months ago.

and should they find her
in the breast of a riverbank
or a cabinet,

I will tell you
facts about scavenger birds;
kettles, wakes and how to chair a committee
with a body on your desk,

as scavenger birds do.
A poem about tragedy poetry. I read once that if you weren't there, you shouldn't talk about it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
love this. read it, understood the title, reread again. beautiful and telling in a discrete way.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic. Stark and paced perfectly. I do appreciate a well placed line-break. :)
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SacredArtist Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Nice Poetry
Jason in Oregon
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Cheers
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MeteorSage Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Artist
Awesome piece.
I love the subject!
10/10
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Hey I'm glad you enjoyed it. Cheers for your comment
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PivotShadow Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
:iconwhatdoesitmeanplz: It's clearly powerful, but I'm not sure what it's about..can someone tell me?
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Hi there, if you have a look on the first page of the comments I actually discussed this a little with :iconim-sabbo: and :iconpepsiboy81: . Thanks for your comment
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MeteorSage Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Artist
OP said it was about tragic poetry and then went on to say " if you weren't there, you shouldn't talk about it."
I think it's a narration directed to people who write about tragedies that never affected them in any way other than making them feel a little bad for someone else.
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
In a way you're right, although this poem is more inward than outward - it's addressing that part of me (or any writer) that feels they can or should be writing about something like this. So it's not so much "You shouldn't write about this!" as "...wait, should I really write about this?" Not sure if that makes sense; I'm not great at explaining stuff, sorry.
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